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One day, one thought, one tear
        Breathe the morning
Let the pain lodge deep inside

Look into my eyes and believe
For the world is
Oh so beautiful
I turn, disbelieving
So
       Much
                  Detail
A kiss, sensual pleasure
   Without the imperfect conveyance of touch
                                     It is overwhelmingly pure
Bringing the heart to the throat, tears to my eyes

Impossible to hold inside
                  To experience all
                                        All at once

         More than beauty
            More than love
              More than anything
                              Anything else

                                                    It is the World
                                                     It is our Earth


                                                    It is Everything
©2007-2008 ~canticum
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Submitted: August 26, 2007
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yeah.. not so sure I like the ending on this one.. or the title.. But I can't think of anything better right now.
And yes, I know the begining's weird..
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~Distant-Euphoria:iconDistant-Euphoria: Aug 26, 2007, 9:39:58 PM
Wow... I like how it's... all over the place! XD MAkes it seem more... -makes wierd hand gesture- And that's a good thing! XDXDXD

~Distant-Euphoria~

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J.P.: Don't I look cool in this fancy ninja headband, Nana?!
Nana: Of course! I'll just keep the paper bag in my pocket for easy access...

Oh yes, DS, I think you are...
~ephend:iconephend: Aug 26, 2007, 11:01:18 PM
I am wwith Distant on this one ! 100%

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Musical Angels fill the air so listen to them sing for you!
*n-g-e:iconn-g-e: Aug 27, 2007, 1:08:31 AM
Very good poem. I like the structure, it complements the content very well. I think the ending's fine, wouldn't worry about it.
~sce-violinist:iconsce-violinist: Aug 27, 2007, 1:27:48 AM
I love this one!

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~You are your best thing
~Tar1988:iconTar1988: Aug 27, 2007, 4:24:24 AM
You seem to be very romantic in your work of late. I don't know why or how, but whatever you do, don't stop it ;)

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"hell is other people"
-Sartre

"each man is his own hell"
-Tar

"All in all, it's pretty much hell all the way, no matter how you slice the cake."
-Adrian Daniels

Join the revolution ! [link]
~CountessK:iconCountessK: Aug 27, 2007, 5:12:23 PM
Loving the format majorly. Makes everything just...flow.

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I :heart: books, I'm addicted to the written word.
Give me tea and no one gets hurt
:tea:
~canticum:iconcanticum: Aug 27, 2007, 6:47:46 PM
XDXD okay, I'll take your word for it! Thank you!
~canticum:iconcanticum: Aug 27, 2007, 6:48:29 PM
:D yay!
and thanks for the :+fav:!
~canticum:iconcanticum: Aug 27, 2007, 6:49:07 PM
Oh, okay ^^ that's good then. Thank you for your comment!
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